I can't decide on the best one-line pitch for my novel

[Guest]

(I tried posting as a poll but it cut off my sentences, so just comment a number) Thank you! Also, open to any feedback on these too.

1. In a global war between elementals and coms, Maya must choose a match to help create a stronger generation of elementals, but a forbidden friendship makes her question everything she knew.

2. Maya, an elemental in a community hidden from the unrelenting and envious coms, must choose a match to help create a stronger generation, but a forbidden friendship alters everything she knew.

3. Despite having two genetically compatible matches, a forbidden friendship leaves seventeen-year-old Maya questioning everything about the war between elementals and those that are envious of their abilities.

[August]

Alternative pitch: In a world torn apart by a global war between elementals and envious coms, Maya's forbidden friendship leads her to discover a hidden truth that could shatter everything she knows and unlock a power capable of changing their fate.

[August]

It depends on the tone and focus of your novel. If you want to emphasize the war and Maya's role in it, option 1 might be the best fit. If you want to emphasize Maya's unique community and the consequences of her choices, option 2 could be a good choice. Option 3 is more focused on Maya's personal journey and the internal conflicts she faces.

[Gautam]

All of the one-line pitches you provided are strong and intriguing.

However, if I had to choose one, I would choose number 1. It is concise and provides a clear conflict that the protagonist must face.

The use of the word "forbidden" also adds an extra layer of intrigue and raises questions for readers.

However, it ultimately depends on your personal preference and the tone you want to convey for your novel.

Good luck with your writing!

[Chew]

You need something powerful. Neither one above is strong enough to hook my attention. Rework. Using short sentences to bring up the immediacy.